[Mtgvenue] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-mtgvenue-iaoc-venue-selection-process-15: (with COMMENT)

Adam Roach <adam@nostrum.com> Wed, 06 June 2018 04:06 UTC

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Subject: [Mtgvenue] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-mtgvenue-iaoc-venue-selection-process-15: (with COMMENT)

Adam Roach has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-mtgvenue-iaoc-venue-selection-process-15: Yes

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COMMENT:
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Thanks to everyone who worked on this document.

I agree with Spencer's concern that this document is tightly tied to the current
IASA structure, which is under revision at the moment. I think it would be an
improvement to describe, in more general terms, the entity responsible for
selecting venues, with a single note early in the document that the entity
currently in that role is the IASA.

I also have a handful of editorial nits that the authors may wish to address.

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Please expand "IASA" in the Abstract, assuming it remains in the Abstract.

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Abstract:

>  It directs the IASA to make available additional process
>  documents around that describe the current meeting selection process.

I'm having a really hard time parsing this sentence. It seems to make sense if
you remove "around".

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§2.1:

>     criteria below, one mandatory and others important, to allow for
>     the case where local laws may require filtering in some
>     circumstances.[MeetingNet]

It's not clear what "[MeetingNet]" is doing here. Perhaps some explanatory text
about what the reader can expect to find at that reference would be useful.

In any case, consider putting a space before the opening bracket.

[Mtgvenue] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-mtgvenu… Adam Roach
Re: [Mtgvenue] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-mtg… Eliot Lear
Re: [Mtgvenue] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-mtg… Pete Resnick
Re: [Mtgvenue] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-mtg… Adam Roach