[multimob] Review of draft-ietf-multimob-fmipv6-pfmipv6-multicast-02

[Behcet Sarikaya <[e-mail]>]

Dear all,

I finished my review while watching Superball 2014 :-), here it is:

- remove MIPv6 from the title

Sec. 2
In addition, the following terms are
   introduced:
   where are the terms?

Sec. 3.1
subnet link
   use on of them

when the group is
   natively received.
   What does this mean, please explain

As group membership information are
   s/are/is

Sec. 3.2
  FMIPv6 coverage is out of scope as it applies to MIPv6, so remove this
section
  Other sections may need adjustment based on this
Sec. 4.1.1
  As FMIPv6 is out of scope, this section needs to be rewritten to cover
PFMIPv6 (if any)
Section 5
  Here you may add one sentence saying that these structures can apply to
MIPv6?
Sec. 5.3
  The size of this option in 8 octets
  s/in/is

Last but not least, I think the draft finishes without a discussion of why
this solution is needed. We need some text on this. I don't know if the
reference "FMIPv6-Analysis" could be useful.

Regards,

Behcet