Re: [multimob] I-D Action: draft-ietf-multimob-fmipv6-pfmipv6-multicast-04.txt

[Stig Venaas <[e-mail]>]

Hi

Thanks for posting this much improved version. I have some comments on
this one too though. Can others in the WG please also see if they are
happy with this latest one?

Here are my minor comments.

Mark it as an update of RFC5568.

Typo in 4.1.2: indicatior

IN 4.2.2 it says:

    The PMAG then waits for receiving the Multicast Acknowledgement
    Option(s) with a HACK message (see Section 5.4) and the creation of
    the bidirectional tunnel with NMAG.

Better language to write "wait until it receives"?

Also:

    It SHOULD start forwarding traffic down the
    tunnel interface for those groups an MLD listener report was
    received from NMAG.

Add "for which"? "For those groups for which an MLD"...

5.2:
In most of the document you use FBACK and HACK, but here you refer
to them as FBAck and HAck.

Appendix A:
You write "In this section", but perhaps say appendix?

Remove change log? Not that useful in the RFC I think.

Stig