[netconf] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13

Robert Sparks via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 10 April 2019 16:17 UTC

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Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13
Reviewer: Robert Sparks
Review Date: 2019-04-10
IETF LC End Date: 2019-04-12
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready for publication as a proposed standard

Nits/editorial comments:

The abstract is quite terse. Please consider expanding it to something that
stands better by itself.

The sentence that starts "Driving these requirements" in the introduction does
not follow where it sits in the paragraph. There is no antecedent for "these
requirements". I suggest replacing the sentence with "Requirements for these
mechanisms are captured in [RFC7923].

The second sentence in the first paragraph of section 3 is a run-on. I suggest
s/2.4, the/2.4. The/