[netconf] mbj review of draft-ietf-netconf-notification-capabilities-01

[Martin Bjorklund <[e-mail]>]

Hi,

Here are my (mostly minor) comments on
draft-ietf-netconf-notification-capabilities-01



o  Terminology

  1. The term that is used in th YP draft is "YANG-Push".  Please
     import that and use it consistently.  (I see at least "YangPush"
     and "Yang-Push").

  2. This document uses the terms "YANG server" and "Yang server".  I
     suggest you change this to "server", and import that from RFC
     8342.


o  Abstract

  The abstract mentions YANG Instance Data, but it doesn't mention
  run-time.  I think it should.


o  Section 1

  s/Rutime/Runtime/


o  Section 1

  s/protocol/management protocol/

  Should you really list HTTPS here?   + add references to NETCONF and
  RESTCONF.


o  Section 3

  Editorial: remove the text within the parentheses.


o  General

  We need to be able to specify on-change support per datastore.

  With support per datastore, it is not quite clear if
  notification-sent-for-config-default and
  notification-sent-for-state-default are needed, and/or how they
  should be interpreted.


o  General

  In YP, support for on-change is optional.   There is a feature
  called "on-change".  I think this document should state explicitly
  that this module is intended for servers that implement that
  feature.


o  Section 3.2

  Editorial:

    We no longer list the WG Chairs in the description.

    Since you use 2119 language in the model, please include the
    boilerplate in the module description.

    The module description doesn't contain the proper copyright text,

    The module should be formatted similar to the rest of the
    IETF-published modules.  I suggest you run

      pyang -f yang --keep-comments --yang-line-length 69 <FILE>

    and then ensure that any additions are consistent with that.


o  Section 3.2

  The top-level container is currently called
  "yangpush-notification-capabilities".

  This doesn't really match the naming in the YP document.

  I suggest it is called "datastore-subscription-capabilities", so
  that we use a word that can be related to the the nodes YP defines,
  such as in "establish-subscription" ... "datastore"
  "datastore-subtree-filter"


o  Section 3.2

  You have:

         units msec;

         units centiseconds;

  I think you probably should do s/msec/milliseconds/


o  Section 3.2

  minimum-dampening-period is optional.  It should be stated what it
  means if this leaf is not present.   (or should the default be 0?)


o  Section 3.2

  The choice update-period is not mandatory, and doesn't have a
  default.  What does it mean if this is not reported?


o  Section 3.2

  The leaf max-objects-per-update is not mandatory.  What does it mean
  if this is not reported?  It can have the value 0.  What does that
  mean?

  Perhaps make a union of uint32 0..max and the enum "infinite" and
  make that the default?  (of course "infinite" is not really
  correct...)


o  General

  I missed some examples, perhaps in an Appendix.



/martin