[Netconf] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-rfc7895bis-06
Erik Kline <ek@google.com> Sat, 30 June 2018 08:15 UTC
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Subject: [Netconf] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-rfc7895bis-06
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Reviewer: Erik Kline Review result: Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-netconf-rfc7895bis-06 Reviewer: Erik Kline Review Date: 2018-06-30 IETF LC End Date: 2018-06-28 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: ready Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: Conceptually, the "checksum" isn't a checksum so much as just a unique identifier. The text in Section 3 text generally seems to acknowledge this (even using checksum in quotation marks), and so I'm left wondering whether "checksum" is really the best name. I've no strong opinion, just this observation, and nothing that should impede this document (I assume bike-shedding may have already occurred). Section 2, item 4 "more than one datastores" -> "more than one datastore". Section 4, I believe ietf-datastores reference can be updated to RFC 8342, if I understand things correctly. Section 4, Author list entry for Rob Wilton lacks "mailto:" before the email address.
- [Netconf] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-n… Erik Kline
- Re: [Netconf] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Martin Bjorklund
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