Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07
Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com> Tue, 24 September 2013 17:57 UTC
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Cc: netext@ietf.org, General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org>, draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications@tools.ietf.org
Subject: Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07
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Hi Suresh - It doesn't look like any of these changes made it into -08? RjS On 8/22/13 4:51 PM, Robert Sparks wrote: > On 8/22/13 4:06 PM, Suresh Krishnan wrote: >> Hi Robert, >> Thanks a lot for the review. We will include the changes in the next >> revision we submit. Please see proposed changes inline. >> >> On 08/22/2013 02:05 PM, Robert Sparks wrote: >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >>> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >>> >>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >>> >>> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >>> you may receive. >>> >>> Document: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07 >>> Reviewer: Robert Sparks >>> Review Date: 2013-08-22 >>> IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-29 >>> IESG Telechat date: not scheduled >>> >>> Summary: This draft is ready for publication as Proposed Standard >>> >>> I had to read through this text several times to convince myself >>> implementers could figure out what order they were required to take >>> steps in vs where they had flexibility: >>> >>> o Upon accepting the Update Notification message, the mobile >>> access >>> gateway MUST process the message and perform the actions >>> based on >>> the Notification Reason. >>> * If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the >>> mobile access gateway MUST first send an Update Notification >>> Acknowledgement message and set the status code field >>> according >>> to the result of processing the Update Notification message. >>> >>> In particular, it's not immediately obvious if there is tension between >>> that "MUST first" and having "the result of processing" available. >>> Please consider rewording to make it clearer that this "result of >>> processing" is not intended to include waiting for the result of some >>> action processing this notification message might trigger. >> I think we can lose the word first without losing anything. Does the >> following rewording work for you? > Yes, thanks! >> >> OLD: >> If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the mobile >> access gateway MUST first send an Update Notification Acknowledgement >> message and set the status code field according to the result of >> processing the Update Notification message. >> >> NEW: >> If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the mobile >> access gateway MUST send an Update Notification Acknowledgement message >> with the status code field set based on the result of processing the >> Update Notification message. >> >>> It might help readers understand the intended usual case retransmission >>> mechanics if the expected default values listed in section 7 were >>> called >>> out earlier in the document. >> Sure. Will call out the defaults at first use. >> >> Thanks >> Suresh >> >
- [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext-upd… Robert Sparks
- Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext… Suresh Krishnan
- Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext… Robert Sparks
- Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext… Robert Sparks
- [netext] Gen-art telechat review: draft-ietf-nete… Robert Sparks
- Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext… Sri Gundavelli (sgundave)
- Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext… Suresh Krishnan
- Re: [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext… Jari Arkko