Re: [netmod] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-netmod-yang-data-ext-04: (with COMMENT)

Martin Bjorklund <mbj@tail-f.com> Mon, 21 October 2019 07:29 UTC

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Subject: Re: [netmod] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-netmod-yang-data-ext-04: (with COMMENT)
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Hi,

Barry Leiba via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org>; wrote:
> Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
> draft-ietf-netmod-yang-data-ext-04: No Objection
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> COMMENT:
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> A fine extension.  Just three editorial nits:
> 
> -- Section 1 —
> 
>    There is no
>    assumption that a YANG data structure can only be used as a top-level
>    abstraction, instead of nested within some other data structure.
> 
> It’s a little odd to use “instead of” after “there is no assumption”; I can’t
> explain it fully, but it feels odd to this native English speaker.  I suggest
> this:
> 
> NEW
>    There is no
>    assumption that a YANG data structure can only be used as a top-level
>    abstraction, and it may also be nested within some other data structure.
> END
> 
>    similar to the existing YANG "augment" statement.
> 
> Make it “similarly”.
> 
> — Section 1.1.1 —
> 
>    The following terms are defined in the Network Management Datastore
>    Architecture (NMDA) [RFC8342].  and are not redefined here:
> 
> The period after the citation should be a comma.

Thanks for these suggestions, I have applied them all.


/martin