Re: [netmod] [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05

"Jonathan Hansford" <jonathan@hansfords.net> Wed, 27 June 2018 08:54 UTC

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Subject: Re: [netmod] [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05
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Re Section 4.1, 2nd paragraph, can I suggest the first sentence be 
reworded along the lines of "Fundamentally, the issue is whether the 
artwork remains readable once folded." And I would add that sentence to 
the end of the previous paragraph and start paragraph 2 afterwards.

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Subject: RE: [Netconf] Editorial comments on 
draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05

>Thanks Jonathan for comments, please see my reply inline below.
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>发件人: Netconf [mailto:netconf-bounces@ietf.org] 代表 Jonathan Hansford
>发送时间: 2018年6月26日 23:46
>收件人:netconf@ietf.org
>主题: [Netconf] Editorial comments on 
>draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05
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>Hi,
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>Just a few editorial comments on 
>draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05:
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>General:Though there is a header to indicate where the artwork starts, 
>there is no footer to indicate where it ends. How would a parser know 
>when to stop?
>[Qin]: Good point, if you follows netmod discussion, Martin has similar 
>suggestion. We need to decide whether we should support fold framing or 
>extract artwork based on header and footer in this draft.
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>Should the header (and footer) be deleted for any artwork that does not 
>require folding?
>[Qin]If we allow the user to specify maximum length limit for each 
>line, I think header and footer is not needed,
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>         If we use header and footer to indicate where the line start 
>and where the line end, header and footer is only needed during artwork 
>extraction phase.
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>Section 4.1: 1st paragraph: A very minor issue, but "e.g." and "etc." 
>should not be used in the same list. "e.g." is used for a list of 
>examples and by implication isn't complete, therefore "etc." is already 
>inferred.
>                           [Qin]: Okay.
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>2nd paragraph: Not sure what the 1st sentence is saying.
>                       [Qin] Suppose the artwork is a table, the table 
>needs to be folded, folding result may look bad.
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>2nd sentence: s/susceptible is/susceptible to3rd sentence: s/fair/fairs
>                     [Qin]: Okay, thanks.
>
>Section 4.2, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: repetition of "out" - one of 
>them needs removingSection 5.2:2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: s/than 
>then/than the3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: s/be lead/lead
>                [Qin]: Okay, thanks.
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>Section 5.3:2nd paragraph: s/Caluculate/Calculate4th paragraph: 
>Arguably this should be from bottom-to-top as, going from 
>top-to-bottom, once you have concatenated two lines the '\' will not be 
>on the folding-column
>             [Qin]:In our code, we will delete unneeded ‘\’ line by line 
>from top to bottom. It think whether from bottom to top or from top to 
>bottom, it doesn’t matter since it is implementation specific.
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>Jonathan
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