[netmod] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netmod-module-tags-06

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Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-netmod-module-tags-06
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2019-03-05
IETF LC End Date: 2019-03-03
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:
Almost ready.  There are a couple of minor issues and a small number of nits. 
Apologies for the slightly late delivery of the review.

Major issues:
None

Minor issues:
Abstract/s1: I would judge that RFC 8407 ought to be normative since it is
updated.

S4.2: using the Netmod working group as contact point for the module is not
future proof.  I am  not sure what the correct contact ought to be: IESG?

S7.2: [This is a thought that occurred to me...] ought there to be an ietf:
security tag?

S9: I would consider RFCs 8199, 8340, 8342 and 8407 to be normative

Nits/editorial comments:
Abstract: s/modules/module's/

Abstract:
OLD:
This document also provides guidance to future model writers, as such, this
document updates RFC8407.

NEW:
This document also provides guidance to future model writers; as such, this
document updates RFC8407.

ENDS

S1.1, title: s/use cases of/use cases for/

S1.1, para 1: s/documents progression/document's development/

S1.1, paras 2, 3 and 5: Suggest s/E.g./For example/

S1.1, para 4: s/e.g./e.g.,/

S2, para 1:
   > All tags SHOULD begin with a prefix indicating who owns their definition.

If I read correctly, the YANG definition in s4.2 REQUIRES that all tags have a
prefix.  For clarity, it would better if this read:
   All tags MUST begin with a prefix; it is intended that this prefix SHOULD
   [or maybe 'should'] indicate
  the ownership or origination of the definition.

S2, para 1: s/yang type/YANG type/ (I think)

S2.2: s/follwing/following/

S3.1, para 2:
OLD:
If the module definition is IETF standards track, the tags MUST also be Section
2.1. Thus, new modules can drive the addition of new standard tags to the IANA
registry, and the IANA registry can serve as a check against duplication.

NEW:
If the module is defined in an IETF standards track document, the tags MUST use
the prefix defined in Section 2.1. Thus, definitions of new modules can drive
the addition of new standard tags to the IANA registry defined in Section 7.2,
and the IANA registry can serve as a check against duplication.

ENDS

S3.2: s/standard/IETF Standard/

S3.3: It would be useful to introduce the term 'masking' used later in the YANG
module definition.

S4.1: I think this usage of RFC 8340 makes it normative.

S4.2, extension module-tag definition: This should contain a pointer to RFC
8342 which discusses the system origin concept.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments: