Re: [netmod] Last Call: <draft-ietf-netmod-revised-datastores-09.txt> (Network Management Datastore Architecture) to Proposed Standard two

[Juergen Schoenwaelder <[e-mail]>]

On Thu, Jan 11, 2018 at 12:32:29PM -0000, tom p. wrote:
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Juergen Schoenwaelder" <[e-mail]>
> Sent: Wednesday, January 10, 2018 4:36 PM
> 
> > Right. Lets see there "two" is used:
> >
> > - 1st paragraph in 2. Objectives: I think the text is clear since it
> >   talks about a concrete example of a configured value and an
> >   operationally used value.
> >
> > - 2nd paragraph in 2. Objectives: This text talks about two separate
> >   branches in the old models, this should be fine.
> >
> > - 4th paragraph in 2. Objectives: I think this is potentially
> >   causing the confusion. It says:
> >
> >     With the revised architectural model of datastores defined in this
> >     document, the data objects are defined only once in the YANG
> schema
> >     but independent instantiations can appear in two different
> >     datastores, one for configured values and one for operational
> state
> >     values.
> >
> >   Perhaps a better wording would be this:
> >
> >     With the revised architectural model of datastores defined in this
> >     document, the data objects are defined only once in the YANG
> >     schema but independent instantiations can appear in different
> >     datastores, e.g., for a configured value and one for an
> >     operationally used value.
> >
> >   This e.g. then kind of continues the example the section started
> >   with. Would this change have avoided the question?
> 
> Juergen
> 
> Yes, I would find that clearer.  Perhaps even better
> 
> OLD
>      e.g., for a configured value and one for an
>     operationally used value.
> NEW
>      e.g., one for a configured value and one (another?)  for an
>      operationally used value.
> 
> I would say 'one' and 'another'  but 'one' and 'one' would be clear
> enough.
>

I now have this:

  With the revised architectural model of datastores defined in this
  document, the data objects are defined only once in the YANG schema
  but independent instantiations can appear in different datastores,
  e.g., one for a configured value and another for an operationally used
  value.

OK?

/js

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