[netmod] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-netmod-factory-default-14: (with COMMENT)

Murray Kucherawy via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Fri, 03 April 2020 20:12 UTC

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Subject: [netmod] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-netmod-factory-default-14: (with COMMENT)
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Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-netmod-factory-default-14: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Section 2:
* "All security sensitive data (i.e., private keys, passwords, etc.)  SHOULD be
overwritten ..." presents a choice.  Why would an implementer not do this? *
"Implementors SHOULD reboot the device or otherwise restart processes needed to
bootstrap it." leads me to the same question.

Nits:
* "Upon receiving the RPC" is followed by a list, so please add a colon
* "datastores(e.g.," -- add a space after "datastores"

Section 3:
Nits:
* "The contents of <factory-default> is defined  ..." -- s/is/are/

Section 5:
* "This document registers one URI in the IETF XML Registry [RFC3688]. ..."
should say explicitly that it's the "ns" sub-registry receiving a new entry.