[OPSAWG] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-10: (with COMMENT)

[Lars Eggert via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-10: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Found terminology that should be reviewed for inclusivity; see
https://www.rfc-editor.org/part2/#inclusive_language for background and more
guidance:

 * Term "traditional"; alternatives might be "classic", "classical",
   "common", "conventional", "customary", "fixed", "habitual", "historic",
   "long-established", "popular", "prescribed", "regular", "rooted",
   "time-honored", "universal", "widely used", "widespread".

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did with these suggestions.

Section 3. , paragraph 62, nit:
> or the QinAny encapsulation. The outer outer VLAN tag is set to a specific va
>                                  ^^^^^^^^^^^
Possible typo: you repeated a word.

Document references draft-ietf-opsawg-l3sm-l3nm-10, but -11 is the latest
available revision.

Document references draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-04, but -06 is the latest available
revision.

Document references draft-ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-framework-00, but -04 is
the latest available revision.