Re: [P2PSIP] AD evaluation: draft-ietf-p2psip-concepts-07

David Bryan <dbryan@ethernot.org> Thu, 26 November 2015 03:55 UTC

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Subject: Re: [P2PSIP] AD evaluation: draft-ietf-p2psip-concepts-07
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Thank you very much for the review and comments.

I will look over the comments, and revise shortly.
On Nov 25, 2015 4:58 PM, "Alissa Cooper" <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:

> I have reviewed this document in preparation for IETF last call. There are
> a few edits that need to be made before this document can be last-called:
>
> 1) The document needs a security considerations section. It is perfectly
> fine if this section mostly points to the security considerations of the
> other p2psip documents, but it needs to be there.
>
> 2) Section 3.5 and Section 7 have text marked as “OPEN ISSUE.” These need
> to be resolved.
>
> 3) Section 1 should be deleted.
>
>
> While you’re making changes, please address the following:
>
> 4) Fix the ID nits.
>
> 5) I think Section 3.5 should reference RFC 6762 and 6763 rather than
> Bonjour.
>
> 6) The Wikipedia references in Section 5 and 6 don’t really seem
> appropriate and don’t add much value, so I would suggest deleting them.
>
> 7) References to “the RELOAD base draft” should not call it a draft and
> should reference the RFC.
>
>
> Thanks,
> Alissa
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