Return-Path: X-Original-To: p2psip@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: p2psip@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id 395D41B396C for ; Thu, 11 Feb 2016 16:38:12 -0800 (PST) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: -2 X-Spam-Level: X-Spam-Status: No, score=-2 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001] autolearn=ham Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id eyyFswz9M-Yk for ; Thu, 11 Feb 2016 16:38:02 -0800 (PST) Received: from mail-ob0-x22f.google.com (mail-ob0-x22f.google.com [IPv6:2607:f8b0:4003:c01::22f]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 3E4F71A6F9B for ; Thu, 11 Feb 2016 16:38:01 -0800 (PST) Received: by mail-ob0-x22f.google.com with SMTP id xk3so99216016obc.2 for ; Thu, 11 Feb 2016 16:38:01 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=softarmor.com; s=google; h=content-type:mime-version:subject:from:in-reply-to:date:cc :message-id:references:to; bh=wOJ4i+RCVGfTLqtroFIJRVW+lRfkFAsHp2H0RmoIRFQ=; b=NzAT409YQPy+sHMl7vWh/sl3R6mMjGjYM4DxtSeiItWVzrQKbi1lPpEPqUjHEnvK/G inDi1ywWsKdII1LpahsHLm10HMH/ADQ4YPEU9FlBxKj9xNqhz8J9tw8TErP5U+HYxAew HMsJdNiosdpwng9zyFntzN0AcnVtelRnDKUxU= X-Google-DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=1e100.net; s=20130820; h=x-gm-message-state:content-type:mime-version:subject:from :in-reply-to:date:cc:message-id:references:to; bh=wOJ4i+RCVGfTLqtroFIJRVW+lRfkFAsHp2H0RmoIRFQ=; b=RXJ2l0gvv2VCyTZw3y1dPEui+NhCNCKgdF9h0EQSuMVM+RRRZMOQ3ZQqAe0BcL6JR0 D673Qb4+PlsFx0IjB34Emc+CkvTH87pVjAa1HZgQT/FfW4IhC7RCvbBV95gq10WUOXBk gF/FmRqWaLxxSER1GNEDih384lXQxu4bkX+B1IamrMWNTaUntH+8PSznkcTu2NPoWWrh VHx0GG7o46lFvQfckQZwG3XjuC9vNx9qeo1CFy9VfWVJctQ6jNiwMPXxn3u6al9GtlwS BQ1uEi7Sr8kbgEHCxMwJgw+Vas2ybEgh1U56JJzvFm9DpgPZ4ldvLvXAoC/xX2IURu2Z 878g== X-Gm-Message-State: AG10YORAr6fwIzaVluFIWaujHOZOSfAKES0R7exCuGMuSYp52JckUi+tv1Q3T06ZkQvPcA== X-Received: by 10.60.162.102 with SMTP id xz6mr38014316oeb.62.1455237481219; Thu, 11 Feb 2016 16:38:01 -0800 (PST) Received: from [192.168.1.129] ([216.243.244.98]) by smtp.gmail.com with ESMTPSA id q10sm7188062obg.1.2016.02.11.16.37.44 (version=TLS1 cipher=ECDHE-RSA-AES128-SHA bits=128/128); Thu, 11 Feb 2016 16:38:00 -0800 (PST) Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="Apple-Mail=_0D8CE48F-A01C-43EA-A61A-A5BD3BBCDF9E" Mime-Version: 1.0 (Mac OS X Mail 9.2 \(3112\)) From: Dean Willis In-Reply-To: Date: Thu, 11 Feb 2016 18:36:59 -0600 Message-Id: References: <338712AE-3E19-4AEF-B40C-AE4C3A5B7F5A@cooperw.in> To: David Bryan X-Mailer: Apple Mail (2.3112) Archived-At: Cc: p2psip Subject: Re: [P2PSIP] AD evaluation: draft-ietf-p2psip-concepts-07 X-BeenThere: p2psip@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.15 Precedence: list List-Id: Peer-to-Peer SIP working group discussion list List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Fri, 12 Feb 2016 00:38:12 -0000 --Apple-Mail=_0D8CE48F-A01C-43EA-A61A-A5BD3BBCDF9E Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Content-Type: text/plain; charset=utf-8 Agreed on all counts. > On Feb 11, 2016, at 10:47, David Bryan wrote: >=20 > Hi all, >=20 > A new version of the draft has been submitted. Alissa, thanks for your = close review, I have addressed the issues you mention (see below), and = don't believe there are actually any current open issues, except = possibly changing this away from the language around pre-5378 = contributions. I am fine with moving it to the newer disclaimer = (conforms to 5378), and will attempt to ask each author to comment on = this thread that they also are fine with it using the new trust = language. Other specifics inline: >=20 > On Wed, Nov 25, 2015 at 4:58 PM, Alissa Cooper > wrote: > I have reviewed this document in preparation for IETF last call. There = are a few edits that need to be made before this document can be = last-called: >=20 > 1) The document needs a security considerations section. It is = perfectly fine if this section mostly points to the security = considerations of the other p2psip documents, but it needs to be there. >=20 > Added, along with an IANA considerations (there are no considerations) > =20 > 2) Section 3.5 and Section 7 have text marked as =E2=80=9COPEN = ISSUE.=E2=80=9D These need to be resolved. >=20 > After review, I believe these have all been resolved. They have been = removed. >=20 > 3) Section 1 should be deleted. >=20 > Section 1 (editors comments) has been deleted. > =20 > While you=E2=80=99re making changes, please address the following: >=20 > 4) Fix the ID nits. >=20 > The only nits now are the pre-5378 contributions and the fact that it = somehow believes one of the figures contains code comments (it doesn't). = There are no other outstanding nits. > =20 > 5) I think Section 3.5 should reference RFC 6762 and 6763 rather than = Bonjour.=20 >=20 > 6) The Wikipedia references in Section 5 and 6 don=E2=80=99t really = seem appropriate and don=E2=80=99t add much value, so I would suggest = deleting them. >=20 > Agreed and corrected. > =20 > 7) References to =E2=80=9Cthe RELOAD base draft=E2=80=9D should not = call it a draft and should reference the RFC. >=20 > Fixed. In addition, RFCs 7363 and 7374 have issued since the last = revision. I have corrected them as well. -sip and -diagnostics are still = drafts, and are still referenced (current version) as such. >=20 > Again, thank you for the review and sorry for the delay in iteration. > =20 >=20 > Thanks, > Alissa > _______________________________________________ > P2PSIP mailing list > P2PSIP@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/p2psip = >=20 > _______________________________________________ > P2PSIP mailing list > P2PSIP@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/p2psip --Apple-Mail=_0D8CE48F-A01C-43EA-A61A-A5BD3BBCDF9E Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Content-Type: text/html; charset=utf-8 Agreed on all counts.

On = Feb 11, 2016, at 10:47, David Bryan <dbryan@ethernot.org>= wrote:

Hi all,

A new version of the draft has been submitted. Alissa, thanks = for your close review, I have addressed the issues you mention (see = below), and don't believe there are actually any current open issues, = except possibly changing this away from the language around pre-5378 = contributions. I am fine with moving it to the newer disclaimer = (conforms to 5378), and will attempt to ask each author to comment on = this thread that they also are fine with it using the new trust = language. Other specifics inline:

On Wed, Nov 25, 2015 at 4:58 PM, = Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:
I have reviewed this = document in preparation for IETF last call. There are a few edits that = need to be made before this document can be last-called:

1) The document needs a security considerations section. It is perfectly = fine if this section mostly points to the security considerations of the = other p2psip documents, but it needs to be there.

Added, along with an IANA considerations (there are no = considerations)
 
2) Section 3.5 and Section 7 have text marked as =E2=80=9COPEN ISSUE.=E2=80= =9D These need to be resolved.

After review, I believe = these have all been resolved. They have been removed.

3) Section 1 should be deleted.

Section 1 (editors = comments) has been deleted.
 
While you=E2=80=99re making changes, please address the following:

4) Fix the ID nits.

The only nits now are the pre-5378 = contributions and the fact that it somehow believes one of the figures = contains code comments (it doesn't). There are no other outstanding = nits.
 
5) I think Section 3.5 should reference RFC 6762 and 6763 rather than = Bonjour. 

6) The Wikipedia references in Section 5 and 6 don=E2=80=99t really seem = appropriate and don=E2=80=99t add much value, so I would suggest = deleting them.

Agreed and corrected.
 
7) References to =E2=80=9Cthe RELOAD base draft=E2=80=9D should not call = it a draft and should reference the RFC.

Fixed. In addition, RFCs = 7363 and 7374 have issued since the last revision. I have corrected them = as well. -sip and -diagnostics are still drafts, and are still = referenced (current version) as such.

Again, thank you for the review and = sorry for the delay in iteration.
 

Thanks,
Alissa
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