[Pals] Warren Kumari's No Objection on draft-ietf-pals-vpls-pim-snooping-05: (with COMMENT)

[Warren Kumari <[e-mail]>]

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COMMENT:
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Thank you for a useful document -- I have a few editorial comments which I
think will make the document more readable, and so even more useful...

Please also see the OpsDir comments (which also have some minor editorial
nits):
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/review-ietf-pals-vpls-pim-snooping-05-opsdir-lc-pignataro-2017-05-10/

My comments:
S 1.  Introduction
O: .  Forwarding Information Base for a VPLS instance is  populated dynamically
by MAC address learning. P: . The  Forwarding Information Base (FIB) for a VPLS
instance is populated dynamically by MAC address learning. C: Was missing a
"The".  Also, might be worth unexpanding "Forwarding Information Base" (sorry,
so used to asking people to expand acronyms, feels odd to suggest the you also
include the acronym, but might be helpful for people who know the term FIB, but
not the expansion :-)).

O: "While this document is in the context of VPLS, the procedures apply  to
regular layer-2 switches interconnected by physical connections as well, albeit
this is outside of the scope of this document.  In that case, the PW related
concept/procedures are not applicable and that’s all." P: "These procedures
also apply to regular layer-2 switches interconnected by physical connections,
but further discussion is out of scope for this document. C: The original
sentence was clunky. I think that the proposed still covers the salient points,
but is easier to read. The "and that's all" in the original also seemed weird.

O: "Notice that traffic is always sent on ports that have point-to-point
connections to routers that are attached to a LAN on which there is a router."
C: Err...   "... routers that are attached to a LAN on which there is a
router." If the router is attached to a LAN, then there is a router on the LAN.
I'm presuming that you mean "routers that are attached to a LAN on which there
is a another router." or "at least one other router"? "If we had some eggs, we
could have eggs and bacon, if we had some bacon..." :-)

O: "Unless explicitly noted, the procedures in this document are used for
either PIM snooping or PIM proxying, and we will largely refer to PIM snooping
in this document." P: "We will use the term PIM snooping in this document; but,
unless explicitly noted, the procedures in this document apply equally to PIM
snooping and PIM proxying". C: I had to read the original a few times, I
*think* that my proposed is clearer, but might be wrong...