[Perc] Adam Roach's Yes on draft-ietf-perc-private-media-framework-10: (with COMMENT)

[Adam Roach via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

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COMMENT:
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I'm glad to see this work finally ready for publication. As I've already
given several rounds of input on this document, I have only minor
editorial comments.
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§2:

>  This may
>  include embedded user conferencing equipment or browsers on
>  computers, media gateways, MCUs, media recording device and more that
>  are in the trusted domain for a given deployment.

Nit: "...media recording devices, and more..."
                   pluralize _/  \_ add comma


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§2:

>  In the context of
>  WebRTC...

Please add an informative citation to https://www.w3.org/TR/webrtc/

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§2:

>  It operates according to the Selective
>  Forwarding Middlebox RTP topologies [RFC7667] per the constraints
>  defined by the PERC system, which includes, but not limited to,

Nit: "...but is not limited to..."

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§6.1:

Nit: The keys are described in the sections that follow in the order
they are typically acquired, but listed in a different order in Figure 4.
This confused me for several moments. Consider reordering Figure 4 to match
the order in which the keys are described.

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