[pim] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-pim-msdp-yang-17: (with COMMENT)
Murray Kucherawy via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Mon, 13 April 2020 01:19 UTC
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Subject: [pim] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-pim-msdp-yang-17: (with COMMENT)
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Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-pim-msdp-yang-17: No Objection When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-pim-msdp-yang/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- [ballot position under construction] I'm assuming the sponsoring AD approved the presence of six authors on the document, exceeding our normal limit of five. I'm a YANG newbie so for the moment I'm going to defer to those more expert at evaluating the syntax and semantics of the model described in Sections 3 and 4 while I go learn more about YANG in general. Thus, the only feedback I have is editorial stuff in Section 5: * "Modifying the configuration can cause MSDP default peers to be deleted or the connection to be rebuilt, and the SA's unexpected filtering." -- does that last clause mean "unexpected filtering by the SA"? * "The key misoperation will broke the existed MSDP connection ... " -- s/broke the existed/break the existing/, right? * "These are the subtrees and data nodes and their sensitivity/vulnerability:" followed by a list of one subtree/node. Maybe just turn that into prose and name the singular subtree? * "... may lead to forged connection attack, ..." -- s/to/to a/ * "... the ACL nodes uncorrected modification may lead to the filter errors." -- "nodes" should be "node's" or "nodes'" * "The unauthorized reading function ..." -- perhaps "Unauthorized reads"? * "... allow the unexpected peer connection rebuilding." -- maybe "allow the unexpected rebuilding of connection peers"? * "Authentication configuration is supported ..." -- feels like this should start a new paragraph
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