Re: [proto-team] revision of draft-ietf-proto-wgchair-doc-shepherding attached

[Henrik Levkowetz <[e-mail]>]

Hi Lars,

on 2006-06-09 16:55 Lars Eggert said the following:
> Hi,
> 
> On Jun 9, 2006, at 16:28, Henrik Levkowetz wrote:
>>   I'm of course biased, having suggested the changes, but I find that
>> to me it seems that the document reads much more smoothly now.  Maybe
>> that's the reason why I found more stuff...
> 
> No problem.
> 
>> 	s/perhaps you he or she/perhaps he or she/
> 
> OK
> 
>> One question for clarification: In the current revision, the "Document
>> Shepherd Write-up" seems to be defined as what's covered under 1.i,  
>> and
>> presumably the "Document Shepherd Questionnaire" is the whole of the
>> (1.a)..(1.i) set of questions.  It seems to me that in some places the
>> document mentions the Document Shepherd Write-up where intention is to
>> talk about talk about both questionaire and (1.i) write-up;
> 
> Actually, I tried to remove the distinction between write-up and  
> questionnaire, because the terms weren't used consistently, and just  
> call the whole set of questions write-up.

Aha.  That works very well for me, but then there's some corrections
needed.  I'll make a text proposal.

> I missed two instances of the term questionnaire. If I change those  
> to write-up, will this be OK? Or do you want to go through the  
> document and look at all places where the write-up is mentioned and  
> check which term should be used?

I'll go through the document.  Maybe not with a fine-toothed comb, but
enough to suggest appropriate changes, I hope.


Regards,

	Henrik

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