Re: [PWE3] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

["Bitar, Nabil N" <[e-mail]>]

Hi Dave,
Related to abbreviations comment below and to be clearer, I renamed the original terminology section to "Abbreviations and Terminology". I also created a subsection called "Abbreviations" ,and "Terminology" became the second subsection.  Here iis how the edits look

3. Abbreviations and Terminology
3.1. Abbreviations

        AIS   Alarm Indication Signal

   AC    Attachment Circuit

   BFD   Bidirectional Forwarding Detection

   CC    Continuity Check

   CCM   Continuity Check Message

   CE    Customer Equipment

   CV    Connectivity Verification

   E-LMI Ethernet Local Management Interface

   EVC   Ethernet Virtual Circuit

   LDP   Label Distribution Protocol

   LoS   Loss of Signal

   MA    Maintenance Association

   MD    Maintenance Domain

   ME    Maintenance Entity

   MEG   Maintenance Entity Group

   MEP   Maintenance End Point

   MIP   Maintenance End Point

   MPLS  Multiprotocol Label Switching

   MS-PW Multi-Segment Pseudowire

   NS    Native Service

   OAM   Operations, Administration, and Maintenance

   PE    Provider Edge

   PSN   Packet Switched Network

   PW    Pseudowire

   RDI   Remote Defect Indication for Continuity Check Message

   RDI   Reverse Defect Indication

   S-PE  Switching Provider Edge

   TLV   Type Length Value

   T-PE  Terminating Provider Edge

3.2. Terminology
This document uses the following terms with corresponding definitions:
- MD Level:  Maintenance Domain (MD) Level which identifies a value in the range of 0-7 associated with Ethernet OAM frame. MD Level identifies the span of the Ethernet OAM frame.
 - MEP:    Maintenance End Point is responsible for origination and termination of OAM frames for a given MEG.
 - MIP:      Maintenance Intermediate Point is located between peer MEPs and can process OAM frames but does not initiate or terminate them.
Further, this document also uses the terminology and conventions used in [RFC6310].


Thanks,
Nabil

From: <Bitar>, Nabil N <[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>>
Date: Wednesday, January 2, 2013 11:28 AM
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Subject: Re: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

Hi Dave,
Sorry for a late reply addressing your comments. Please, see inline.

Thanks,
Nabil

From: "Black, David" <[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>>
Date: Monday, August 20, 2012 8:57 PM
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Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please
see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06
Reviewer: David L. Black
Review Date: August 20, 2012
IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012

Summary:
This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that
should be fixed before publication.

<NB> Thanks.



This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires,

including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior.

The draft is generally in good shape.  I found a few minor nits.



1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to

be expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the

draft listing all of them would be helpful.

<NB> Done.



2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2:



     covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions, Administration and



Opertaions -> Operations.

<NB> Thanks. Done.



3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional

information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document:



     [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006.

[MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", Metro Ethernet Forum Technical Specification MEF16, January 2006.

<NB> changed it to :



4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination:



  == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22
     longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines

<NB> That will be fixed.

Thanks,
--David
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