Re: [PWE3] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

"Bitar, Nabil N" <nabil.n.bitar@verizon.com> Wed, 02 January 2013 16:30 UTC

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Hi Dave,
Sorry for a late reply addressing your comments. Please, see inline.

Thanks,
Nabil

From: "Black, David" <david.black@emc.com<mailto:david.black@emc.com>>
Date: Monday, August 20, 2012 8:57 PM
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Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please
see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06
Reviewer: David L. Black
Review Date: August 20, 2012
IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012

Summary:
This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that
should be fixed before publication.

<NB> Thanks.



This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires,

including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior.

The draft is generally in good shape.  I found a few minor nits.



1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to

be expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the

draft listing all of them would be helpful.

<NB> Done.



2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2:



     covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions, Administration and



Opertaions -> Operations.

<NB> Thanks. Done.



3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional

information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document:



     [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006.

[MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", Metro Ethernet Forum Technical Specification MEF16, January 2006.

<NB> changed it to :



4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination:



  == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22
     longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines

<NB> That will be fixed.

Thanks,
--David
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