[quicwg/base-drafts] RFC Editor comment 4 (Issue #4970)

Lucas Pardue <notifications@github.com> Fri, 25 March 2022 17:40 UTC

Date: Fri, 25 Mar 2022 10:40:29 -0700
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The repeated "when" clauses in this sentence make it
     difficult to parse.  If our suggestion does not correctly capture
     your intent, could you please rephrase?


Original:
A stream becomes unblocked when the Insert Count becomes
unblocked when the Insert Count becomes greater than or equal to the
Required Insert Count for all encoded field sections the decoder has
started reading from the stream.

Perhaps:
A stream becomes unblocked when the Insert Count becomes
unblocked.  When the Insert Count becomes greater than or equal to the
Required Insert Count for all encoded field sections, the decoder has
started reading from the stream.



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[quicwg/base-drafts] RFC Editor comment 4 (Issue … Lucas Pardue
Re: [quicwg/base-drafts] RFC Editor comment 4 (Is… Mike Bishop
Re: [quicwg/base-drafts] Auth48: Difficult to par… Mike Bishop
Re: [quicwg/base-drafts] Auth48: Difficult to par… Mike Bishop