Re: [radext] WGLC for Publication of TLS-PSK draft as an Informational RFC

[Jan-Frederik Rieckers <[e-mail]>]

Hi to all,

I have read the updated -01 version of the document and generally 
support submitting this document.

However, I have found some nits that I would like to see fixed before 
publication:


* Section 5 Introduction
The first sentences are a repetition of the wording in section 3.
It's not clear to me why this sould be repeated for RADIUS clients, 
since it is also true for RADIUS servers.

I would suggest to find a different introduction into this section, that 
does not repeat the (more or less) exact words of section 3.


* Cipher suites

In Section 5 for RADIUS clients it says "Implementations MUST use ECDH 
cipher suites."
I don't understand why this requirement is included only here and not in 
the server section as well.


* TBDs

There are still 2 TBD's included: One in Section 2 (Terminology), one in 
Section 10 (Acknowledgements)
Either these should be removed or text should be added

* Note to RFC Editor

Section 11 (Changelog) should probably include a note to the RFC-Editor 
that this section may be removed.


Typos/Punctuation (Both section 6.1):

-A RADIUS/UDP server, is typically configured
+A RADIUS/UDP server is typically configured


-When the yserver
+When the server

Cheers,
Janfred


On 03.08.23 18:13, Margaret Cullen wrote:
> This is an official, two-week Working Group Last Call for sending the TLS-PSK draft (https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-radext-tls-psk/) to the IESG for publication as an Informational RFC.  This call will run for two weeks, ending at 1800 UTC on Thursday August 17th.
> 
> Please read the draft.  Then, reply to this message indicating that you DO SUPPORT or DO NOT SUPPORT sending this document to the IESG for publication.  If you DO NOT SUPPORT publication of the draft as-is, please list any blocking issues that should, in your opinion, prevent publication of this document.  If possible, suggest text that would resolve your issue.
> 
> Thank you,
> Margaret
> 
> (For the radext co-chairs:  Margaret Cullen and Valery Smyslov)
> 
> 

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