Re: [regext] I-D Action: draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05.txt

Hi Jim,

We addressed your feedback and submitted the new version.

Thanks,
Tobias

> On 1. Dec 2020, at 15:58, Tobias Sattler <sattler@united-domains.de> wrote:
> 
> Hi Jim,
> 
> Thank you for your swift feedback.
> 
> We will go through it and make the adjustments where needed.
> 
> Best,
> Tobias
> 
>> On 1. Dec 2020, at 15:35, Gould, James <jgould=40verisign.com@dmarc.ietf.org <mailto:jgould=40verisign.com@dmarc.ietf.org>> wrote:
>> 
>> In reviewing draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05, below is my feedback:
>>  
>> Replace “defnition” with “definition” in two places.
>> Section 2.3 Maintenance Elements
>> I would modify the description of the <maint:item> element.  Specifically, change the second sentence to read like “This element is used in a maintenance item EPP <info> response and <poll> message.”.
>> Section 3.1.3.1 “Query one maintenance item”
>> The name “Query one maintenance item” could be shortened to “Info Maintenance Item”.
>> I would explicitly define the Info Maintenance Item command element (<maint:id>) without making the reference to Section 2.3, since Section 2.3 defines the Info Maintenance Item Response. 
>> The command example incorrectly references <maint:impact>blackout</maint:impact> instead of <maint:impact>full</maint:impact>.
>> The dates in the response example should be updated to more recent dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020)
>> I would define the response similar to:
>>                                                                i.      When an <info> command has been processed successfully, the EPP <resData> element MUST contain a child <maint:infData> element that identifies the maintenance namespace.  The <maint:infData> element contains the <maint:item> element defined in Section 2.3.
>> Section 3.1.3.2 “Query maintenance list”
>> The name could be updated to “Info Maintenance List”.
>> I would explicitly define the Info Maintenance List element (<maint:list/>), which is an empty element to indicate an Info Maintenance List command.
>> The dates in the response example should be updated to more recent dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020)
>> I would define the response similar to:
>>                                                                i.      When an <info> command has been processed successfully, the EPP <resData> element MUST contain a child <maint:infData> element that identifies the maintenance namespace.  The <maint:infData> element contains the <maint:list> element with a list of <maint:listItem> elements.  The <maint:listItem> element contains the following child elements:
>> 1.  <maint:id>: <maint:id> defined in Section 2.3.
>> 2.  <maint:start>: <maint:start> defined in Section 2.3.
>> 3.  <maint:end>: <maint:end> defined in Section 2.3.
>> 4.  <maint:crDate>: <maint:crDate> defined in Section 2.3.
>> 5.  <maint:upDate>: OPTIONAL <maint:upDate> defined in Section 2.3.
>> Sect 3.1.4 “EPP <poll> Command”
>> The dates in the poll response example should be updated to more recent dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020)
>>  
>> -- 
>>  
>> JG
>>  
>>  
>>  
>> James Gould
>> Fellow Engineer
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>> On 12/1/20, 7:32 AM, "regext on behalf of internet-drafts@ietf.org <mailto:internet-drafts@ietf.org>" <regext-bounces@ietf.org <mailto:regext-bounces@ietf.org> on behalf of internet-drafts@ietf.org <mailto:internet-drafts@ietf.org>> wrote:
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>>     A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
>>     This draft is a work item of the Registration Protocols Extensions WG of the IETF.
>>  
>>             Title           : Registry Maintenance Notifications for the Extensible Provisioning Protocol (EPP)
>>             Authors         : Tobias Sattler
>>                               Roger Carney
>>                               Jody Kolker
>>                 Filename        : draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05.txt
>>                 Pages           : 20
>>                 Date            : 2020-12-01
>>  
>>     Abstract:
>>        This document describes an Extensible Provision Protocol (EPP)
>>        mapping for registry's maintenance notifications.
>>  
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