Re: [regext] Minor feedback on draft-ietf-regext-rfc7483bis-00

"Hollenbeck, Scott" <shollenbeck@verisign.com> Thu, 11 June 2020 18:40 UTC

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From: regext <regext-bounces@ietf.org> On Behalf Of Jasdip Singh
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Subject: [EXTERNAL] [regext] Minor feedback on draft-ietf-regext-rfc7483bis-00



Hello Scott.



While doing the shepherd writeup, noted few minor things which may help polish the doc further.



*       5.5: Add “The” to the "Autonomous System Number Object Class” section title to be consistent with others.

[SAH] OK

*       1, 5, 5.4, 5.5, 7, 8: Looks like the [I-D.ietf-regext-rfc7482bis] reference needs the correct link. Additionally, in section 8, [I-D.ietf-regext-rfc7482bis] has no link.

[SAH] I don’t see the issue, Jasdip. I see references to [I-D.ietf-regext-rfc7482bis], which is correct. The reference includes the correct URL, too. What’s missing?

There is a potential  issue with references to 7482bis due to a limitation with xml2rfc. The two documents reference each other, and as soon as you update one the bibliography that xml2rfc uses to manage references gets outdated. I have to edit the final text file manually to make this fix.

*       1.1: Is the trailing period intended for member, object, and object class definitions?

[SAH] I think those are just editorial artifacts that can be removed for consistency.

*       2.1: Should lunarNic prefix in the fields match the casing of the lunarNIC prefix for the extension in 4.1? I know there was some discussion on this but not sure if they are orthogonal or not.

[SAH] They should probably be consistent to avoid questions just like this one 😊

*       4.5: Looks like extraneous trailing period for eventDate description.

[SAH] I can remove that.

*       5.3: Does the description of the network member need a trailing period?

[SAH] Probably note, since the other descriptions don’t use a trailing period.

*       5.5: "high-level structure of the autnum object class consists of information about the network registration” - should “network” be changed to "autonomous system number”?

[SAH] Yes.

*       Should phrase “registry unique” be “registry-unique” to be consistent?

[SAH] Yes.

*       13.2: [RFC7480] needs a link.

[SAH] What link? The reference in the text looks appropriate. If you’re looking at an HTML version of the document and there’s a problem with a missing link, that’s a bug in the tools that generate the HTML version of the document.

*       Typo “referencce” in the Changes from RFC 7483 section. Also, “00:” used twice in the list.

[SAH] 00 is used twice because there’s been both a -00 version of the individual submission and a -00 version of the working group version. I’ll fix the typo.  Thanks for the feedback!



Thanks,

Jasdip