[rmcat] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-rmcat-rtp-cc-feedback-11: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Thu, 20 October 2022 12:43 UTC

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Subject: [rmcat] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-rmcat-rtp-cc-feedback-11: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-rmcat-rtp-cc-feedback-11: No Objection

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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-rmcat-rtp-cc-feedback-11

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Linda Dunbar for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/IlQmtbncyGJ1B6qPc-IdbuGSqEA).

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Boilerplate

Document still refers to the "Simplified BSD License", which was corrected in
the TLP on September 21, 2021. It should instead refer to the "Revised BSD
License".

### Outdated references

Document references `draft-ietf-tcpm-RFC793bis`, but that has been published as
`RFC9293`.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 2, paragraph 6
```
e feedback and data packets are sent and the feedback is similar in size to
^^^^
```
Use a comma before "and" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
are closely connected and short).

## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool

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