[rmcat] SBD write-up: minor inconsistencies to resolve
Anna Brunstrom <anna.brunstrom@kau.se> Mon, 13 November 2017 10:50 UTC
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Subject: [rmcat] SBD write-up: minor inconsistencies to resolve
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Dear David and co-authors, When preparing the write-up for the SBD draft I found some smaller inconsistencies, mainly in the Definitions section, see comments below. Could you please submit a new version resolving the issues. The write-up is ready for the draft to be submitted for publication once the new version is available. Thanks, Anna Comments from draft write-up review: In section 2: - M is defined twice. Also the value is restricted to "where M <= N" in the definition of E_M, but I think this applies to M in general and should be part of the definition of M. - sum_N and num_VM are defined but never used in the rest of the text - num_MT and sum_M are not defined but used later in the text - punctuation is also inconsistent in this section in case you want to fix that while editing In section 2.1: - For p_* : "Flows are separated when the skew_est|var_est|freq_est measure is greater than p_s|p_f|p_d|p_mad." - There are three measures for four thresholds? - p_l is not described. In section 3.2.3: - second last line: "For calculation of freq_est p_v=0.7" - This line seems misplaced and redundant as freq_est is discussed in 3.2.4 and the value of p_v is discussed there. - last line: "For the grouping threshold p_mad=0.1" - Also not sure that this really fits here, but should perhaps rather be mentioned in 3.3.1 instead? But ok if you want to keep it. Section 6: - "The algorithm described in this memo has so far been evaluated using simulations." - Should this be "... simulations and small scale experiments" or the experiments in the LCN paper are not relevant to mention? - "Real network tests using the proposed congestion control algorithms will help confirm the default parameter choice." - Not clear what " the proposed congestion control algorithm" refers to. References: - As you are making an update, please also update [I-D.ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc] and [I-D.dt-rmcat-feedback-message] to the latest version, using the avtcore version for the feedback message draft.
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