Re: [rmcat] Roman Danyliw's No Objection on draft-ietf-rmcat-nada-12: (with COMMENT)

"Xiaoqing Zhu (xiaoqzhu)" <xiaoqzhu@cisco.com> Fri, 06 September 2019 16:28 UTC

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Subject: Re: [rmcat] Roman Danyliw's No Objection on draft-ietf-rmcat-nada-12: (with COMMENT)
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Many thanks, Roman, for providing your review comments and corresponding editorial suggestions.

The revised draft has incorporated all these edits: https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-rmcat-nada-13

Aside from the typo/grammar fixes, the updated sentence in Section 4.1 now read:

... Additional studies in real-world settings suggested in Section 8 could
gather further insight on how to choose and adapt these parameter values
in practical deployment.

Best regards,
Xiaoqing

On 9/4/19, 1:03 PM, "Roman Danyliw via Datatracker" <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:

Roman Danyliw has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-rmcat-nada-12: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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(1) Section 4. Per “In the experimental phase of this draft …”, what
experiment is being proposed and what is the exit criteria for it? Is this a
reference to Section 8? If so, perhaps, drop the introductory clause:

OLD:
In the experimental phase of this draft, additional studies in real-world
settings will gather further learnings on how to choose and adapt these
parameter values in practical deployment.

NEW:
Additional studies in real-world settings suggested in Section 8 could gather
further insight on how to choose and adapt these parameter values in practical
deployment.

(2) Editorial Nits:
Section 1. Typo. s/descirbed/described/

Section 3. Typo. s/abrevity/brevity/

Section 3. Editorial. s/into compressed bitstream/ into a compressed
bitstream/

Section 4. Typo. s/mutliplier/multiplier/

Section 4.1. Editorial? For the MULTILOSS variable, the default value is
listed as “7.”, it seems like it should read 7 (no period), but maybe there is
a missing decimal portion?

Section 4.2. Typo. s/milliseonds/milliseconds/

Section 4.3. Typo. s/stablizes/stabilizes/

Section 4.3. Typo. s/absense/absence/

Section 5.1.3. Typo. s/straighforward/ straightforward/

Section 6.3. s/enviornments/environments/

Section 6.3. s/futher/further/

Section 7. Typo. s/descirbed/described/

Section 7. Typo. s/implemention/implementation/

Section 7. Typo. s/wirelss/wireless/

Section 8. Typo. s/adapte/adapt/

Section 8. Typo. s/preferrably/preferably/

Section 8. Typo. s/set up/setup/

[rmcat] Roman Danyliw's No Objection on draft-iet… Roman Danyliw via Datatracker
Re: [rmcat] Roman Danyliw's No Objection on draft… Xiaoqing Zhu (xiaoqzhu)