Re: [Roll] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08

[Meral Shirazipour <[e-mail]>]

Hi,
  Thanks for considering the comments. The link is ok I think, some spaces within the url were causing an error. 
This works:
[occuswitch] http://www.philipslightingcontrols.com/assets/cms/uploads/files/osw/MK_OSWNETBROC_5.pdf,  May 2012.

Best,
Meral

-----Original Message-----
From: peter van der Stok [mailto:[e-mail]] 
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Subject: RE: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08

Hi Adrian,

good news. I try to do the update this week.

Greetings, thanks,

Peter

Adrian Farrel schreef op 2015-03-23 20:12:
> Hi Peter,
> 
> This all looks good.
> The changes are small, but it would be worth catching them in a new 
> revision.
> Please post it when you have it, no need to check with me.
> 
> Once you've done that, we'll hand it over to Alvaro as the incoming 
> AD, and he can put it on an IESG telechat.
> 
> Cheers,
> Adrian
> 
> 
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: peter van der Stok [mailto:[e-mail]]
>> Sent: 23 March 2015 14:49
>> To: Meral Shirazipour
>> Cc: [e-mail];
> [e-mail]
>> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of
>> draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-
>> building-08
>> 
>> HI Meral,
>> 
>> Thanks for the suggestions.
>> I have no problem with any of them. I think they are quite justified.
>> Thank you very much for pointing them out.
>> Concerning scene and group control. I may suppress the word "scene".
>> About [occuswitch] I have to look for a valid alternative. However, 
>> these links are maintained by a company, which changes information 
>> frequently.
>> Sorry for missing out some of the acronyms. I thought I caught them 
>> out all.
>> 
>> Greetings,
>> 
>> Peter
>> 
>> 
>> Meral Shirazipour schreef op 2015-03-22 21:28:
>> > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background 
>> > on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at 
>> > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.
>> >
>> > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call 
>> > comments you may receive.
>> >
>> > Document: draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08
>> > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
>> > Review Date: 2015-03-21
>> > IETF LC End Date:  2015-03-23
>> > IESG Telechat date: NA
>> >
>> >
>> > Summary:
>> > This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I 
>> > have some comments.
>> >
>> > Major issues:
>> >
>> > Minor issues:
>> >
>> > Nits/editorial comments:
>> > -[Page 1], "RPL" first used in title/abstract, Would be good to 
>> > spell it out.
>> > -[Page 5], Section 2, "Monitoring of functional correctness is at 
>> > least as important.". As important as what? (not clear) -[Page 5], 
>> > Section 2, "Devices typically communicate their status regularly 
>> > and send alarm messages notifying a malfunction of equipment or 
>> > network."
>> > Not clear what equipment is? network node is an equipment?
>> > -[Page 6], Section 2.1, "for large installation"--->"for a large 
>> > installation"
>> > -[Page 8], Section 2.2.2, "fire detectors and the smoke dampers 
>> > need to be put in place to meet the stringent delay requirements."
>> > Where can we find a value for the delay requirement of fire detectors?
>> > A value or reference would be good.
>> > -[Page 9], Section 2.2.4,"advanced scene and group control". Not 
>> > clear what "scene" means.
>> > -[Page 13], Section 4.1, "assumes the role as 
>> > authoritative"--->"assumes the role of authoritative"
>> > -[Page 16], section 4.1.8, please spell out first use CBC-MAC 
>> > (Cipher Block Chaining Message Authentication Code) -[Page 16], 
>> > section 4.1.10, it would be good to give the RFCs.
>> > -[Page 16], section 4.2.4, MLE to spell out at first use "mesh link 
>> > establishment"
>> > -[Page 22], "CoAp" first used in section 7.4, but spelled out in 
>> > section 8.
>> > -[Page 18], section 5.1.1., "to throw away too late messages", how 
>> > are too late messages identified?
>> > -[Page 27], [I-D.ietf-6lo-lowpanz] to be replaced by RFC7428 -[Page 
>> > 28], link to [occuswitch] to be verified.
>> > -Through the document both "ms" and "msec" are used. Selecting one 
>> > for consistency would be better.
>> >
>> > Best Regards,
>> > Meral
>> > ---
>> > Meral Shirazipour
>> > Ericsson
>> > Research
>> > www.ericsson.com