Re: [Roll] [OPS-DIR] OPS-DIR Review of draft-ietf-roll-mpl-parameter-configuration-06

[Yusuke DOI <[e-mail]>]

Hi Menachem,

Thank you for the review!

On 2015-07-07 15:36, מנחם דודג' wrote:
> Section 2.1 could be improved if for each parameter defined a reference
> would be given to indicate where the parameter is defined. I found most
> of them in: draft-ietf-roll-trickle-mcast-12 but for example, I'm not
> sure what the Proactive_Forwarding flag is used for.

I would add reference. It's defined in section 5.4 of the MPL draft.

> Section 4 discusses Security Considerations but I think that some
> phrases in the paragraph are too general.
> Example:  "other methods for security should be applied" does not
> indicate what these methods are or where to look for them.

Is this clear?: "other method to protect integrity between DHCPv6 
servers and clients"
My intention is the next sentence on ZigBee IP is an example.

> Another Example: "To protect attacks from outside of
> the network, unneccessary DHCPv6 packets should be filtered on the
> border router between the ROLL network and the Internet"  - what is
> meant by "unnecessary DHCPv6 packets"?

I mean remote DHCPv6 server case.

Is this clear?: "DHCPv6 packets SHOULD be filtered on the border router 
between the ROLL network and the Internet, except for the packets 
between the ROLL network and a remote DHCPv6 server or DHCPv6 relays 
configured to manage the network"


> NITS
> ====

Thanks, I would update and clarify the sentences on your review on the 
next revision.

Regards,

Yusuke