[Roll] Re: [Last-Call] Re: Opsdir telechat review of draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-39

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Hi Pascal，

looks good!  Thanks.

Best Regards,
Ran


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Date: 2025年03月07日 16:37
Subject: [Last-Call] Re: Opsdir telechat review of draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-39

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Hello again Ran
Many thanks for your review! 

I committed the changes as https://github.com/roll-wg/dao-projection/commit/e1abc57abb8952a421eede7dc62c6d6776869a9b .
The first run of BCP 14 changes is committed as https://github.com/roll-wg/dao-projection/commit/fb87f13f17446c849aeec5f8cab90abd03089ef5 .

Plan is to make an additional pass on BCP 14 and publish asap.

Please see below :



Le mer. 5 mars 2025 à 16:07, Ran Chen via Datatracker <[e-mail]> a écrit :

Reviewer: Ran Chen
 Review result: Has Nits
 
 # OPSDIR review of draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection
 
 I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing
 effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
 comments were written with the intent of improving the operational aspects of
 the IETF drafts. Comments that are not addressed in the last call may be
 included in AD reviews during the IESG review.  Document editors and WG chairs
 should treat these comments just like any other last-call comments.
 
 This document extends RFC 6550, RFC 6553, and RFC 8138, introducing the DAO
 Projection
  mechanism to enhance RPL. It enables the RPL root or an external controller to
  proactively install optimized routes, improving routing efficiency,
  reliability, and resource utilization. Additionally, the draft addresses
  backward compatibility, all nodes involved in P-DAO processing must support
  this specification. The document is clear and well-written. The motivation is
  described well. The document is almost ready for publication.
 ## Nits
 -I suggest BCP14 (may=> MAY, should=>SHOULD, must => MUST) change

separate thread
 -The document use TrackID, Trackid, trackID, it is recommended to unify them.
done
 -s/additional paths betwwen nodes/ additional paths between nodes/
fixed
 -s/ oriented From Ingress / oriented from Ingress /
ok
 -s/ Building Tracks With RPL/ Building Tracks with RPL/
done
 -s/ edges leads to/ edges lead to/
nope, the subject is "following"
 -s /may be ommitted/ may be omitted/
done
 -s/ The latter is often is preferred/ The latter is often preferred/fixed
 -s/ the position preceeding the one/ the position preceding the one/fixed
 -s/ The (suggected)/ The (suggested)/
fixed! 

Many thanks Ran!


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Pascal