Re: [Roll] [OPS-DIR] OPS-DIR Review of draft-ietf-roll-mpl-parameter-configuration-06

Hello Yusuke,

Yes, thank you kindly, your changes are fine, the meaning is clear.

Best Regards,
Menachem

2015-07-08 18:30 GMT+03:00 Yusuke DOI <yusuke.doi@toshiba.co.jp>:

> Hi Menachem,
>
> Thank you for the review!
>
> On 2015-07-07 15:36, מנחם דודג' wrote:
>
>> Section 2.1 could be improved if for each parameter defined a reference
>> would be given to indicate where the parameter is defined. I found most
>> of them in: draft-ietf-roll-trickle-mcast-12 but for example, I'm not
>> sure what the Proactive_Forwarding flag is used for.
>>
>
> I would add reference. It's defined in section 5.4 of the MPL draft.
>
>  Section 4 discusses Security Considerations but I think that some
>> phrases in the paragraph are too general.
>> Example:  "other methods for security should be applied" does not
>> indicate what these methods are or where to look for them.
>>
>
> Is this clear?: "other method to protect integrity between DHCPv6 servers
> and clients"
> My intention is the next sentence on ZigBee IP is an example.
>
>  Another Example: "To protect attacks from outside of
>> the network, unneccessary DHCPv6 packets should be filtered on the
>> border router between the ROLL network and the Internet"  - what is
>> meant by "unnecessary DHCPv6 packets"?
>>
>
> I mean remote DHCPv6 server case.
>
> Is this clear?: "DHCPv6 packets SHOULD be filtered on the border router
> between the ROLL network and the Internet, except for the packets between
> the ROLL network and a remote DHCPv6 server or DHCPv6 relays configured to
> manage the network"
>
>
>  NITS
>> ====
>>
>
> Thanks, I would update and clarify the sentences on your review on the
> next revision.
>
> Regards,
>
> Yusuke
>
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