Re: [rtcweb] Comments on draft-ietf-rtcweb-use-cases-and-requirements-12

[Magnus Westerlund <[e-mail]>]

WG,

I haven't seen any feedback on this. I will leave it to the authors
choice if they think what I suggest are just clarification or changes.
If they are changes to what is required then I request that they seek WG
confirmation and if that is not provided the comments are rejected.

Cheers

Magnus

On 2014-01-16 15:03, Magnus Westerlund wrote:
> Hi,
> 
> As part of preparing the Doc shepherd write-up I have reviewed the draft
> and have the following comments and suggestions for improvements.
> I have to note that I found violations of formal requirements in this
> documents. So these are all suggestions for improvements.
> 
> 
> 1. After the WG last call this draft implemented half of my suggestion
> of making clear what additional requirements use case resulted in.
> However, it didn't implemented the part where I suggested that on the
> first occurrence of a requirement, the full requirement text needs to be
> included. I note that also Mary Barnes commented on the current format
> making things hard to read.
> 
> 2. Abstract:
> Requirements on the browser functionality are derived from use-cases.
> 
> Shouldn't there be a "the" before use-cases in this sentence?
> 
> 3. Section 3.3.8 title:
> 
> Simple Video Communication Service with sharing
> 
> Isn't simply having sharing in the title a bit unclear? Shouldn't this
> be "Desktop" or "Application" sharing?
> 
> 4. section 4.1:
>    F26     It must be possible to move from one network
>            interface to another one
> 
> I think it is unclear what shall move in this requirement. Wouln't it be
> clearer to state this like this?
> 
>    F26     The communication session must survive across a change of the
> network interface used by the session.
> 
> Cheers
> 
> Magnus Westerlund
> 
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