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Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-lpwan-overview-07.txt

Stephen Farrell <stephen.farrell@cs.tcd.ie> Fri, 12 January 2018 22:59 UTC

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Subject: Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-lpwan-overview-07.txt
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Thanks,

Nit fixed in editor's copy. If folks on the lpwan list provide
me with sentences for example applications, I'd add that in. I
agree it could be useful.

Cheers,
S.

On 12/01/18 21:42, Andrew G. Malis wrote:
> Hello,
> 
> I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft.
> The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related
> drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review. The purpose of
> the review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more
> information about the Routing Directorate, please see ​
> http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir
> 
> Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it
> would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other IETF Last
> Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through
> discussion or by updating the draft.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-lpwan-overview-07.txt
> Reviewer: Andy Malis
> Review Date: 12 January 2018
> IETF LC End Date: 16 January 2018
> Intended Status: Informational
> 
> Summary:
> No issues found. This document is ready for publication.
> 
> Comments:
> This is a well-written introduction to the subject area and relevant
> technologies, especially for someone not otherwise familiar with the topic.
> It is clearly ready for publication.
> 
> Major Issues:
> No major issues found.
> 
> Minor Issues:
> No minor issues found.
> 
> Nits:
> Section 2.4.1 includes a list of example applications, such as smart
> municipality/city infrastructure monitoring and management, for the Wi-SUN
> Alliance Field Area Network. It would be a very helpful addition to the
> document if the other three described technologies (sections 2.1, 2.2, and
> 2.3) could also include example applications, such as Remote Energy and
> Heat Monitoring for LoRaWAN (I found that via a web search).
> 
> Section 2.1.2
> s/o  - Join Server:/o  Join Server:/
> s/EU868MHz/EU 868MHz/
> 
> Thanks,
> Andy
> 

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