[RTG-DIR] Rtgdir last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-09

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Reviewer: Victoria Pritchard
Review result: Has Nits

Hello,

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The
Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as
they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special
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Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-09
Reviewer: Victoria Pritchard
Review Date: 24th August 2021
Intended Status: Standards Track

Summary:
This document is basically ready for publication but has nits that should be
considered prior to publication.

Comments:
This is a concise document, indicating clearly where it fits, what it defines,
and how it should be used. Seems a good idea to have the common things in a
re-usable module.

Major Issues:
No major issues found.

Minor issues:
No minor issues found.

Nits:
In Section 3, I think it might be easier to read if each grouping was shown
individually with the accompanying explanation next to the diagram. In Section
4, I noticed some typos: In the inbound-bw feature, defines -> defined
"identity igmpv3" description states IGMPv2 adminisitrative -> administrative
(seen in a few places) "list forwarding-profile-identifier": Forwrding ->
Forwarding