Re: [RTG-DIR] Routing directorate review of draft-ietf-pals-vpls-pim-snooping-04.txt

Olivier Dornon <olivier.dornon@nokia.com> Mon, 13 March 2017 09:30 UTC

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Subject: Re: [RTG-DIR] Routing directorate review of draft-ietf-pals-vpls-pim-snooping-04.txt
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Jia,

Thank you for you review.

I found all your remarks valid, I'll publish an updated version shortly.

Thanks,
Olivier.

On 03/12/2017 04:14 PM, Hejia (Jia) wrote:
>
> Hello,
>
> I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this 
> draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or 
> routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG 
> review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is 
> to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about 
> the Routing Directorate, please see 
> ?http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir
>
> Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, 
> it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other 
> IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them 
> through discussion or by updating the draft.
>
> Document:draft-ietf-pals-vpls-pim-snooping-04.txt
>
> Reviewer: Jia He
>
> Review Date: 2017-03-10
>
> IETF LC End Date: -
>
> Intended Status: Informational
>
> Summary:
>
> This document is basically well written, the nits listed below are 
> tiny which in my opinion should not block further procedures.
>
> Comments:
>
> I found the examples in the appendix helped a lot to understand the 
> procedures of PIM snooping and PIM proxying for VPLS as described in 
> this draft.
>
> Major Issues:
>
> No major issues found.
>
> Minor Issues:
>
> 1) Section 1.1, beginning of Page 5,
>
> "Notice that traffic is always sent on ports that have point-to-point
>    connections to routers ot that are attached to a LAN on which there
>    is a router, even those on which there are no snooped group
>    memberships, because IGMP snooping alone can not determine if there
>    are interested receivers beyond those routers."
>
> I found this sentence difficult to read. It is recommended to 
> reorganize the sentence.
>
> Nits:
>
> 1) Section 2.2.1, Page 7, s/MUSTforward/MUST forward
>
> 2) Sections 2.6.3 & 2.6.4, Figures 1 &2, add (PP) as the 
> abbreviation after Prune-Pend  similar to NoInfo r(NI) and Join (J)
>
> 3) Appendix B, Page 31, add "Figure 3" before the title "An example 
> Network for Triggering Assert"
>
> B.R.
>
> Jia
>