Re: [RTG-DIR] Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06

Linda Dunbar <linda.dunbar@futurewei.com> Sun, 29 January 2023 23:17 UTC

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From: Linda Dunbar <linda.dunbar@futurewei.com>
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ShuPing, 

Thank you very much for the explanation to your comments. 
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage/  has changes to reflect the suggestions from you. 

Can you please change the State of the RTGdir review to READY? 

All your comments have been addressed. 


-----Original Message-----
From: Pengshuping (Peng Shuping) <pengshuping@huawei.com> 
Sent: Friday, January 27, 2023 7:49 PM
To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dunbar@futurewei.com>; rtg-dir@ietf.org
Cc: bess@ietf.org; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage.all@ietf.org
Subject: RE: Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06

Hi Linda, 

Please find in line below. 

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Linda Dunbar [mailto:linda.dunbar@futurewei.com]
> Sent: Friday, January 27, 2023 12:56 PM
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> 
> Shuping,
> 
> Thank you very much for the review. Sorry for the late response.
> 
> Please see below of the changes to address your comments.
> 
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Shuping Peng via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org>
> Sent: Tuesday, October 25, 2022 2:36 AM
> To: rtg-dir@ietf.org
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> Subject: Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06
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> Reviewer: Shuping Peng
> Review result: Has Nits
> 
> Hello
> 
> I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of this draft.
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> Document: draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06.txt
> Reviewer: Shuping Peng
> Review Date: 25-Oct-22
> Intended Status: Informational
> 
> Summary:
> 
> This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits that 
> should be considered prior to being submitted to the IESG.
> 
> Comments:
> 
> 3.1.3
>   "The SD-WAN Traffic Segmentation is enabled on a single SD-WAN 
> Service to a
>   single
>    subscriber." Here the word "subscriber" is used for the first time. More
>    associations with the context or more explanations would be 
> appreciated.
> [Linda] Good point. This sentence is removed as the information is 
> duplicated.
> 
> 5.2
>    UPDATE #1b for Route Route 12.1.1.x/24:
>      - MP-NLRI Path Attribute:
>          12.1.1.x/24
>          Nexthop: 2.2.2.2 (C-PE2)
>      - Encapsulation Extended Community: Type= SDWAN-Hybrid
>      - Color Extended Community: YELLOW
> 
> Should the Type be "MPLS" instead of "SDWAN-Hybrid" here since it is 
> mentioned above that "...suppose that Route 10.1.x.x/16 can be carried 
> by either MPLS or IPsec and Route 12.1.1.x/24 can only be carried by MPLS..."?
> 
> Nits:
> 1. SDWAN or SD-WAN?
> [Linda] SDWAN is same as SD-WAN. Added it to the definition section.
> 
> 2. page 15, s/for the Node Loopback address:/for the Node Loopback 
> address.
> [Linda] what do you mean?

":" -> "."

> 
> 3. page 17, 18, s/Type, Tunneltype, Tunnel-type/TYPE?
> [Linda] what do you mean?

Could these various formats be simply unified as "TYPE"?

Best regards,
Shuping 

> 
> Thank you very much
> Linda