[RTG-DIR]RtgDir Last Call review of draft-ietf-teas-applicability-actn-slicing-07

[Alvaro Retana <[e-mail]>]

Hi!

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this
draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or
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it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other
comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through
discussion or by updating the draft.

Document: draft-ietf-teas-applicability-actn-slicing-07
Reviewer: Alvaro Retana
Review Date: August 12, 2024.
Intended Status: Informational


Summary: This document is basically ready for publication but I have
some concerns that I think should be resolved before publication.

Comments:

The document is well structured and easy to read.

I have two concerns:

(1) Security Considerations

The text in §6 is good.  For completeness, it would benefit from a
pointer to the Security Considerations in rfc8453 and rfc9543, as well
as the Privacy Considerations in that last document.


(2) References

Based on the definitions from the IESG Statement on Normative and
Informative References [1], I believe some of the Informative
references should be Normative because they refer to "documents that
must be read to understand or implement the technology" in this
document.

The terminology from I-D.ietf-teas-enhanced-vpn is used.

Unless the text in §4 is used as an example of the applicability (but
that was not mentioned), the drafts/RFCs mentioned there as specifics
on how the ACTN framework is applied to network slicing should be
Normative: I-D.ietf-teas-actn-pm-telemetry-autonomics,
I-D.ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang, I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang,
I-D.ietf-teas-te-service-mapping-yang, I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te, RFC8299,
and RFC8466.

[1] https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/statement-iesg-iesg-statement-normative-and-informative-references



Alvaro.