[sacm] ECP 04 review

Chris Inacio <inacio@cert.org> Wed, 27 March 2019 01:05 UTC

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Subject: [sacm] ECP 04 review
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Sorry, I’m late with this, but here it is.

3.1:

Picture: I’m a little confused by “Administrative Interface and API” because it doesn’t connect to anything. I’m going to assume those apply across the components, but maybe some text would help there.

3.1.1.1: Please don’t start sentences with “It”.

Also, it appears that this definition creates an agent that can only operate in “polled” mode. Was that intentional?

3.2.3: So this states that posture collection is driven by the agent on the endpoint (of course it is called “Event Driven Collection”), but that seems at odds with the description in 3.1.1.1

3.2.4: Title needs to be refined, because there are multiple “Query” lines in the 3.1 diagram, and I think this only refers to the right most one. Also, this is back to polling; not event based. But doesn’t contradict 3.2.3.

You punctuate your other lists in the document (see section 3) but you don’t punctuate this one?

9.1.2 Can you reword so the text before the itemize list goes together with the list.

NITS:

3: Last paragraph “insupport” -> “in support”

3.1.6 Missing period at end of paragraph.

4.5.3.1. List without punctuation again; while most lists do.

Okay, actually you just change list punctuation later in the document.



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[sacm] ECP 04 review Chris Inacio