Re: [salud] Christer's review of draft-ietf-salud-alert-info-urns-09

Laura Liess <laura.liess.dt@googlemail.com> Thu, 23 January 2014 14:23 UTC

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Subject: Re: [salud] Christer's review of draft-ietf-salud-alert-info-urns-09
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Hi,

Thank you for the comments.
Please find inline the
changes I intend to do in version -11   based on your comments and the
corresponding discussion and also my personal opinion. Please let me know
if I mised something or if for some reason you  don't agree.

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> Remove the references from the Abstract.
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[LL] Done in  version-10.

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> There are a number of editorial inconsistences that needs to be fixed.
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> E.g. “Alert-Info header field” vs “SIP Alert-Info header field” vs
> “Alert-Info”
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[LL]  OK. Change  “SIP Alert-Info header field” and “Alert-Info” to
“Alert-Info header field”


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> E.g. “180 (Ringing)” vs “180 Ringing”
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[LL] OK. Change  “180 Ringing” to “180 (Ringing)”

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> Etc.
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> As the draft updates RFC 3261, I would like to have a section named
> “Update to RFC 3261”. Now there are only a few places in the introduction
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[LL]  See the a separate discussion on this issue.



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> I am not sure the text in section 1.2 belongs to the Introduction. It is
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[LL] OK. Separate main section.

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> I am not sure the text in section 1.3 belongs to the Introduction. We
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[LL] OK. Separate main section.

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> Section 1.1 says:
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> “In [RFC3261] this is done by including a URI in the Alert-Info header
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> Should the text say that the header field includes a REFERENCE to a tone?
> Later in the paragraph, you DO talk about the referenced tone.
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[LL] Would you agree with the text   “In [RFC3261] this is done by
including a URI in the Alert-Info header field, that specifies a Reference
to the tone.”  ?


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> Section 1.1 says:
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> “The URI is most commonly the HTTP URL to the audio file.”
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> s/”the audio file”/”an audio file”
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[LL] Agree.

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> Section 1.1. says:
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> “It is not possible to provide semantic indications or names for rendering
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>                 that signals the intent and allows the recipient UA to
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> The sentence is very confusing. Why not simply say something like:
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[LL] OK. I will replace the text with the text provided by Paul in
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/salud/current/msg00456.html.


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> Section 4 defines the ABNF for the URN, but the is no text on how to “map”
> it into the Alert-Info header field ABNF:
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> For example, I assume that the URN is encoded using the opaque-part format
> of the absoluteURI, and that the sceme value is “urn”. I think it would be
> good to indicate that.
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[LL]  My understanding is that we don't have consensus that  the current
text must be changed. I would leave the text as it is.


Thank you
Laura

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> Regards,
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> Christer
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