Re: [secdir] SECDIR review of draft-ietf-multimob-handover-optimization-05.txt

[Carlos Jesús Bernardos Cano <[e-mail]>]

Dear Chris,

thanks for your review. Some comments inline below...

On Sun, 2013-11-03 at 03:32 +0000, Chris Lonvick (clonvick) wrote:
> Hi,
> 
> I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's 
> ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the 
> IESG.  These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the 
> security area directors.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat 
> these comments just like any other last call comments.
> 
> Overall, I found the document to be understandable and I believe that all of the security concerns have been documented.
> 
> I did find some editorial nits that you may want to address.
> 
> In Section 2, the phrase "Along this document..." is used.  It would be better to use something like, "In this document...".

[Authors] Thanks, we'll change it.

> 
> In Section 4.3.1.2, the phrase "which is be responsible of managing this counter." is used.  I think it would be better to use "which is responsible for managing this counter.".

[Authors] Thanks, we'll fix it in -06.

> 
> The first sentence in Section 9 is, "This document defines the new following elements which values to be allocated by IANA:"  I think it would be better to say "This document establishes new assignments to the IANA mobility parameters registry."

[Authors] OK, we'll change that in -06.


Thanks again,

Carlos

> 
> Best regards,
> Chris