Re: [secdir] [Last-Call] Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-roll-aodv-rpl-09

[Charlie Perkins <[e-mail]>]

Hello Tero,

Thanks for your comments, useful as always.  Please see a bit of 
follow-up below.


On 3/22/2021 9:41 AM, Tero Kivinen via Datatracker wrote:
> The title of the draft has some acronyms which are not expanded (AODV, P2P) and
> if you expand them the title comes way too long. I would propose a usable
> title, which might not need to use all possible acronyms, but would better
> explain what this document is trying to do.

How about "Supporting Asymmetric Links in Low Power Networks"? Replacing 
"LLNs" by "Low Power Networks" is probably O.K. because lossy is almost 
implicit given low power (or, often, reality).


>
> Nits:
>
> In section 1 the text "RPL [RFC6550] (Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy
> Networks)" defines acronyms differently than what is used everywhere else. In
> all other cases the document uses format where the acronym is in parenthesis
> after the full text, i.e. "Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy Networks
> (RPL) [RFC6550]" format. I would propose using the same format also for here.
Done.

>
> In section 1 there is acronym DAG which is not expanded, expand it on first
> use.
I think that sentence reads better just omitting DAG.


>   Also there are unexpanded acronyms DAO, P2MP, which are not used anywhere
> else, perhaps just expand them here. In same paragraph there is also acronym
> MOP which is not expanded here on its first use, but it is expanded later.
> Expand it here on its first use.

Done, except that I thought it would be better to exhibit the acronym 
DAO since it is well known to readers familiar with RPL.


>
> What is the difference between different reserve bits X and r in sections
> 4.1/4.2 and 4.3?
I made them all to be reserved bits 'X'.

>
> Period missing from the end of sentence of the Option Length description in
> Section 4.3.
Done.

>
> In the IANA considerations section I propose add a note to RFC editor saying
> that the sentences saying " The parenthesized numbers are only suggestions."
> needs to be removed prior publication.
>
>

Done!

Naturally Yours,
Charlie P.