Re: [secdir] Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-wson-encode-27

"Moriarty, Kathleen" <kathleen.moriarty@emc.com> Wed, 04 March 2015 20:34 UTC

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From: "Moriarty, Kathleen" <kathleen.moriarty@emc.com>
To: Shawn M Emery <shawn.emery@oracle.com>
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Hi Shawn,

Thanks for your review of the draft, it was helpful.  One comment inline.

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> On Feb 23, 2015, at 2:02 AM, "Shawn M Emery" <shawn.emery@oracle.com>; wrote:
> 
> I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's
> ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.
> These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security
> area directors. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these
> comments just like any other last call comments.
> 
> 
> The draft specifies an encoding scheme for information on a Wavelength Switched Optical Network
> (WSON).  Specifically, information that is used for Routing and Wavelength Assignment (RWA).
> 
> The security considerations section does exist and discloses that the draft does not impose
> any security considerations in itself, but does admit that documents that reference this draft
> would have considerations for privacy, spoofing, and tampering of any associated data.  I agree
> with this assertion.
> 
> General comments:
> 
> None.
> 
> Editorial comments:
> 
> Usually the Abstract is the first section in the draft.

I think this is from a template as I've seen this a few times.  If the RFC editor is okay with it...

> The abbreviations should have the expanded word with the corresponding capital letter.
> GMPLS is not initially expanded in the Abstract section.
> s/RB identifier./RB identifiers./

Thanks!
Kathleen
> 
> Shawn.
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