Re: [secdir] Secdir review of draft-ietf-martini-gin-10.txt

Adam Roach <adam@nostrum.com> Wed, 17 November 2010 13:37 UTC

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Radia:

Thanks for the review! One quick comment.

On 11/16/10 23:16, Nov 16, Radia Perlman wrote:
> 1) Page 3 para 2 line 3: "users" ->  "user's"

The sentence begins: "The users registered individual reachability 
information with this authority..."

In this case, we are talking about a class of users (plural, not 
possessive) who registered (past-tense verb, not adjective) information.

The construction is a bit awkward, and I can see how you would read it 
differently than intended. I'll see what I can do to make it less 
confusing; perhaps "The users would register..."

/a