[secdir] Secdir telechat review of draft-ietf-wish-whip-14

Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Thu, 09 May 2024 20:30 UTC

Return-Path: <noreply@ietf.org>
X-Original-To: secdir@ietf.org
Delivered-To: secdir@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from ietfa.amsl.com (localhost [IPv6:::1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id CD374C1519BB; Thu, 9 May 2024 13:30:39 -0700 (PDT)
MIME-Version: 1.0
Content-Type: text/plain; charset="utf-8"
Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit
From: Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org>
To: secdir@ietf.org
X-Test-IDTracker: no
X-IETF-IDTracker: 12.11.0
Auto-Submitted: auto-generated
Precedence: bulk
Message-ID: <171528663982.47122.6858069033655787075@ietfa.amsl.com>
Date: Thu, 09 May 2024 13:30:39 -0700
Message-ID-Hash: TPX65WUXXAC6YQ2KYU3G5MB75BJZP2F2
X-Message-ID-Hash: TPX65WUXXAC6YQ2KYU3G5MB75BJZP2F2
X-MailFrom: noreply@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Rule-Misses: dmarc-mitigation; no-senders; approved; emergency; loop; banned-address; member-moderation; header-match-secdir.ietf.org-0; nonmember-moderation; administrivia; implicit-dest; max-recipients; max-size; news-moderation; no-subject; digests; suspicious-header
CC: draft-ietf-wish-whip.all@ietf.org, last-call@ietf.org, wish@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 3.3.9rc4
Reply-To: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>
Subject: [secdir] Secdir telechat review of draft-ietf-wish-whip-14
List-Id: Security Area Directorate <secdir.ietf.org>
Archived-At: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/secdir/TKPBpHyU2R7qclfAAgIm0vLrJbQ>
List-Archive: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/secdir>
List-Help: <mailto:secdir-request@ietf.org?subject=help>
List-Owner: <mailto:secdir-owner@ietf.org>
List-Post: <mailto:secdir@ietf.org>
List-Subscribe: <mailto:secdir-join@ietf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <mailto:secdir-leave@ietf.org>

Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Ready

I reviewed this document as part of the Security Directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Security Area
Directors.  Document authors, document editors, and WG chairs should
treat these comments just like any other IETF Last Call comments.

Document: draft-ietf-wish-whip-14
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2024-05-09
IETF LC End Date: 2024-04-04
IESG Telechat date: 2024-05-16

Summary: Ready


Major Concerns: None


Minor Concerns: None


Nits:

IDnits offers these complaints:

 ** There are 15 instances of too long lines in the document, the longest
    one being 45 characters in excess of 72.

 == There are 2 instances of lines with non-RFC6890-compliant IPv4 addresses
    in the document.  If these are example addresses, they should be changed.

 -- The document has examples using IPv4 documentation addresses according
    to RFC6890, but does not use any IPv6 documentation addresses.  Maybe
    there should be IPv6 examples, too?