[secdir] secdir review of draft-groves-mikey-sakke-00

"Glen Zorn" <gwz@net-zen.net> Sun, 30 January 2011 11:55 UTC

From: Glen Zorn <gwz@net-zen.net>
To: secdir@ietf.org, Michael.Groves@cesg.gsi.gov.uk, iesg@ietf.org, ietf@ietf.org
Date: Sun, 30 Jan 2011 18:57:44 +0700
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Subject: [secdir] secdir review of draft-groves-mikey-sakke-00
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I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security area
directors.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
like any other last call comments.

EDITORIAL COMMENTS

In the Abstract, the acronym IDPKC doesn't match the capitalized letters in
its expansion.  Suggestion: s/Identifier-based Public Key
Cryptography/Identifier-Based Public Key Cryptography/

In section 1, paragraph 2, s/legislation/legislations/.

Why is the word "identifier" (and variants) persistently capitalized?  It
doesn't appear to be being used as a proper noun.

In the title of section 2, s/Mode;/Mode:/.

In section 2.1, paragraph 1, the acronym "TGK" is not expanded on first use.

There is no IANA Considerations section, FULL STOP.

[secdir] secdir review of draft-groves-mikey-sakk… Glen Zorn