Re: [secdir] Secdir review of draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment

["Lee, Yiu" <[e-mail]>]

Hi Tobias,

Thanks for reviewing the draft. Comments inline:

Thanks,
Yiu

From:  Tobias Gondrom <[e-mail]>
Date:  Sunday, October 14, 2012 3:47 PM
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Subject:  Secdir review of draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment
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I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security area
directors.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
like any other last call comments.


I believe this document (draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment) has an
adequate security considerations section and the main security risks are
sufficiently described for an informational "deployment considerations" RFC.

COMMENTS: 
section 2.6: 
"Internet hosts such as servers must no longer rely solely on IP address to
identify an abused user."
Don't you mean here: "... an abusive user."
and again in the next sentence "...to identify an abused user..." should be
"...to identify an abusive user".

[YL] Fixed.

Nits: 
- section 1: Overview
third sentence: first mention of "softwire" may require a reference

[YL] Fixed.

- section 2.5, last paragraph:
s/Depedning on the rate of NAT table changes/Depending on the rate of NAT
table changes

[YL] Fixed.


Best regards, Tobias