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Re: [secdir] Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-calext-eventpub-extensions-12

Daniel Migault <daniel.migault@ericsson.com> Tue, 23 April 2019 13:02 UTC

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From: Daniel Migault <daniel.migault@ericsson.com>
To: Rich Salz <rsalz@akamai.com>, "secdir@ietf.org" <secdir@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [secdir] Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-calext-eventpub-extensions-12
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Thanks for the review Rich!
Yours, 
Daniel

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Subject: Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-calext-eventpub-extensions-12

Reviewer: Rich Salz
Review result: Has Nits

This is the SECDIR last-call review, intended to be input to the Security AD's.

Ready with nits.

The Security Considerations and Privacy Considerations are short, but they seem to reasonably refer to already-published documents.

Following are nits I noticed.

Abstract "a number of new iCalendar properties and components" -> "a new iCalendar component and a number of properties"  Maybe stike "iCalendar"

Sec 1, STRUCTURED-DATA. In my opinion the confirmation code would be the most useful new info :)

Sec 1, SOURCE Is it redefined or extended?

Sec 2, para 2.  "In a break with this 'tradition' ..." --> "Breaking with this practice, ..."

Sec 3, "When a calendar client receives a calendar component" Should the second calendar be CALENDAR? Should the first be "iCalendar"?

Sec 3.1.1, uppercase "vcard"?

Sec 3.1.2.1 "non of which" --> "none of which"

Sec 4 Perhaps add a sentence saying where this syntax is defined. Is this the complete iCalendar spec or is it just changing a few things?

Sec 5.1, etc "as laid down in" Is kind of informal wording.

Sec 6, the notation has "value=URI" but the example has "URL" (Sec 7.3, etc., uses URI in both parts)

Sec 10, "applications using" Is "acting on" better?

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