Re: [secdir] Review of draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis-07
"Bert Wijnen \(IETF\)" <bertietf@bwijnen.net> Tue, 08 February 2011 10:06 UTC
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Subject: Re: [secdir] Review of draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis-07
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Tina, thanks for your review and comments All comments together are being considered by the editors and possibly will result in a new revision. We'll keep you updated. But I believe you are also on our netconf wg mailing list, so you'll see it there too. Bert Wijnen Document Shepherd ----- Original Message ----- From: "Tina Tsou" <tena@huawei.com> To: <secdir@ietf.org> Cc: <iesg@ietf.org>; <draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis@tools.ietf.org>; <ietf@ietf.org> Sent: Tuesday, February 08, 2011 3:05 AM Subject: Review of draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis-07 >I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's ongoing > effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. These > comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security area > directors. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > It is well written, so only some editorial comments are below. > > #1 > " > 2.2. Authentication, Integrity, and Confidentiality > ... > 2.3. Authentication > ... > " > > Perhaps the Titles of 2.2 and 2.3 can harmonize better to explain why there > are two "authentications" here. > > #2 > " > 6.2. Subtree Filter Components > > A subtree filter is comprised of XML elements and their XML > attributes. There are five types of components that may be present > in a subtree filter: > > o Namespace Selection > > o Attribute Match Expressions > > o Containment Nodes > > o Selection Nodes > > o Content Match Nodes > ... > " > > If a figure could be provided to describe the relationship among these 5 > components and when it becomes what, it would be very helpful for readers to > understand more easily. > > #3 > " > 6.2.3. Containment Nodes > > Nodes that contain child elements within a subtree filter are called > "containment nodes". > > I would say "Child Elements Nodes" or "Child Nodes" might be a little bit > more of straight forward than "Containment Nodes". > > > #4 > " > 7.2. <edit-config> > ... > Parameters: > ... > merge: The configuration data in the <config> parameter is > merged with the configuration at the corresponding level in > the target datastore. This is the default behavior. > ... > " > Has the <config> parameter been introduced before? > > > Best Regards, > Tina TSOU > http://tinatsou.weebly.com/contact.html > > > >
- [secdir] Review of draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis-07 Tina Tsou
- Re: [secdir] Review of draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis… Bert Wijnen (IETF)
- Re: [secdir] Review of draft-ietf-netconf-4741bis… Bert (IETF) Wijnen