Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-11
Robert Moskowitz <rgm@labs.htt-consult.com> Fri, 07 February 2020 19:32 UTC
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To: Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-11
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Donald, Thanks for the catch. I got a little too rambunctious in my indenting. :) On 2/7/20 12:29 AM, Donald Eastlake wrote: > Hi Bob, > > Sorry to delay in response... > > Changes look good to me with one little exception: On page 52, after > the line beginning "Section 6", the next three lines are nicely > indented but I believe the fourth line of text is sort of a > continuation of the line beginning "Section 6" and so should not be > specially indented but should be left justified lining up with the > words "Section 6". > > Thanks, > Donald > =============================== > Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) > 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA > d3e3e3@gmail.com <mailto:d3e3e3@gmail.com> > > > On Mon, Jan 27, 2020 at 11:25 AM Robert Moskowitz > <rgm@labs.htt-consult.com <mailto:rgm@labs.htt-consult.com>> wrote: > > Donald, > > This is a partial update which I believe addresses your comments > plus a strong request to justify no PFS. > > Please check that I have indeed addressed your comments. > > More edits for other comments next. > > Bob > > On 1/20/20 11:18 PM, Donald Eastlake wrote: >> I have reviewed this document as (a very late) part of the security >> directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being >> processed by the IESG. >> >> The summary of the review is Ready with Nits. >> >> Sorry to get this review in so late but, while approved by the IESG, >> the draft is still in revised draft needed state so this may do some >> good. On the security front, although the draft is pretty complex and >> I am not that familiar with HIP, I did not see any significant >> security issues that were not already called out in the draft. So I >> concentrated on possible editorial issues. >> >> Editorial: >> >> Section 1.1, 3rd paragraph, page 5. Delete "However," a the beginning >> of the 2nd sentence. It doesn't make sense. >> >> Section 2.3, Definitions should be in alphabetic order. >> >> Section 2.3: It seems to me that people who are puzzled about what >> something means are most likely to be puzzled by the acronym. So I >> would put the acronym first, where there is an acronym or acronym-like >> term to use, then the expansion in parenthesis or in the body of the >> definition. This done for a couple of entries like CMAC and CKDF but >> most are the other way. >> >> Section 3 last paragraph and Section 12.10 5th bullet: "to use" -> "use of" >> >> I think OGA and KEYMAT should be in the Definitions list and KEYMAT, >> which I assume just is short for "keying material", should be expanded >> on first use in Section 6.3. Alternatively, you could just replace all >> occurrences of KEYMAT with "Keying Material". >> >> Section 5.3.2, page 23. The first sentence of the first paragraph >> starting on that page has problems. Maybe "chose" should be "choses" >> but I'm not sure: >> "The DH_GROUP_LIST parameter contains the Responder's order of >> preference based on which the Responder chose the ECDH key contained >> in the HOST_ID parameter (see below)." >> >> Appendix A, first sentence, "allows to identify" -> "allows identifying" >> >> Appendix B, "IEDG" -> "IESG" >> >> Appendix B, around the middle of page 51, right after the line >> beginning with "Section 6," there are three line with a blank line >> before and after. I found this confusing at first. I suggest those >> three line also be indented. >> >> Appendix B, page 52, "SHOUDS" -> "SHOUDs" >> >> Thanks, >> Donald >> =============================== >> Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) >> 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA >> d3e3e3@gmail.com <mailto:d3e3e3@gmail.com> > > -- > Robert Moskowitz > Owner > HTT Consulting > C: 248-219-2059 > F: 248-968-2824 > E: rgm@labs.htt-consult.com <mailto:rgm@labs.htt-consult.com> > > There's no limit to what can be accomplished if it doesn't matter > who gets the credit > -- Standard Robert Moskowitz Owner HTT Consulting C:248-219-2059 F:248-968-2824 E:rgm@labs.htt-consult.com There's no limit to what can be accomplished if it doesn't matter who gets the credit
- [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-11 Donald Eastlake
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Eric Vyncke (evyncke)
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Robert Moskowitz